Smart buildings are being built now that can do lots of things. What would you like to see buildings

2018-11-26 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

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First, I hope for smart building that be perfectly run by natural resources like a sunlight and wind. In the nearfuture, technicians combine the state of the art technics on the building with natural recources. For example, Experts will try to insert some programs into the window or wall to control internal temperature automatically. To be specific, If the temperature is higher than expected temperature, The sunlight will be reflected by the new technique instead of using air conditional. I just think that It is visible near future and It is genuine smart building.

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Hello [이름] [이름]. Thanks once again for this. This is actually a cool idea. A lot of companies are actually working towards building more eco-friendly facilities.

- T. Beth

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First, I hope for smart building that be perfectly run by natural resources like a sunlight and wind.

>>> First of all, I hope for smart building to perfectly utilize natural resources like a sunlight and wind.   

In the nearfuture, technicians combine the state of the art technics on the building with natural recources.

>>> In the near future, technicians would combine state of the art technics on the building with natural resources.    

For example, Experts will try to insert some programs into the window or wall to control internal temperature automatically.

>>>   CORRECT. (For example, experts will try to insert some programs into the window or wall to control internal temperature automatically.

To be specific, If the temperature is higher than expected temperature, The sunlight will be reflected by the new technique instead of using air conditional.

>>> To be specific, if the temperature is higher than desired, the sunlight will be controlled by the new technique instead of using air conditioning.     

I just think that It is visible near future and It is genuine smart building.

>>>  I just think that it is possible in the near future and it is a genuine feature of a smart building.  


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