Smartphone

One thing I always carry with me is my phone. This phone helps me stay connected with my family and friends. I also use it to study, listen to music, and take pictures. Without that phone, I would feel lost. This is why it is very important to me.

Great job, Jenny!

You wrote very clearly about your smartphone.

I like how you explained why it’s important,  to stay connected with family and friends, study, listen to music, and take pictures. That was very well organized!

I agree,  without a phone, we can feel lost sometimes. I also think it’s amazing that a phone can do so many things at once.

If you could add one more sentence, you might write about your favorite app or what you use your phone for the most. For example:

“My favorite app is YouTube because I can watch videos and learn new things.”

Excellent work, Jenny. Keep it up!

~Teacher Cathy

 

One thing I always carry with me is my phone.

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OR>>I always keep my phone with me.

This phone helps me stay connected with my family and friends.

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OR>>My phone allows me to stay in touch with my family and friends.

I also use it to study, listen to music, and take pictures.

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OR>>I use it for studying, listening to music, and taking photos.

Without that phone, I would feel lost.

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OR>>I would feel lost if I didn’t have my phone.

This is why it is very important to me.

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OR>>That’s why my phone is so important to me.