Smoking while walking is very harmful to people.

2010-11-25 · 첨삭 강사 abby

학생이 쓴 원문

I insist the government impose the fine on smoking while walking. I could't endure the indirect smoking when someone is walking through in front of me. What make the matters worse, I wouldn't escape from the fog if he walks even faster than me because the wind usually blows toward me. Smokers don't know how bad impact indirect smokers being taken. Smokers insist that they do not have many places where they can smoke. As matter of fact, there's law that says people can't smoke in any building. That means they should get out to smoke. However that doesn't mean they make a bad effect on people outside. I think the law that keep people from smoking needs the law that prohibit smoke when walking. Smokers should smoke in proper site which is allowed to smoke

강사 첨삭

Hi there [이름]!You always inspire me with your good compositions. I find them so interesting. Moreover, you made a very fascinating essay today. I totally agree to you. I really hate those people who smoke while walking because frankly speaking, I don’t like the smell and they might also fire my dress. Anyway, same here in the Philippines. I just wish that the congress would pass a law that would prohibit them to smoke just anywhere they like though there are already places which aren’t allowed for them to smoke to. Yet I’m not contented as you do. Furthermore, our health as non-smokers is also affected in this case. Nevertheles, thank you for writing again [이름]. Keep up the good work and always be positive! Take care and I’ll see you tomorrow! Enjoy your day! =)) T. Abby    Smoking while walking is very harmful to people. >> correct. >> Smoking while walking is very harmful to other people. I insist the government impose the fine on smoking while walking.>> I insist the government to impose a penalty/fine for those who smoke while walking on the street. >> I insist that the government should impose a law that would require a penalty/fine to those who smokes while walking.I could't endure the indirect smoking when someone is walking through in front of me. >> I couldn’t endure a person smoking to walk through in front of me.What make the matters worse, I wouldn't escape from the fog if he walks even faster than me because the wind usually blows toward me.>> What  makes it worse is that I couldn’t escape from his smoke even if he walks faster than me because the wind would surely blow it toward me.Smokers don't know how bad impact indirect smokers being taken. >> Smokers don’t know  how bad they could affect those indirect smokers. >> Smokers are not much aware of how bad they could affect the second  hand smokers.Smokers insist that they do not have many places where they can smoke.>> Smokers usually insist that they don’t have many places to smoke to. >> Smokers always say a reason that they have very limited places to smoke to.As matter of fact, there's law that says people can't smoke in any building. >> correct >> As a matter of fact, there’s a law that says, “Smokers couldn’t smoke in any building”. That means they should get out to smoke.>> correct >> This means that they should go out of the building to smoke. However that doesn't mean they make a bad effect on people outside. >> However, this doesn’t mean that they could affect those people out of the building already.I think the law that keep people from smoking needs the law that prohibit smoke when walking.>> I think there must be a law that would prohibit those smokers to smoke while walking. >> I guess there should be a law that would keep those non-smokers away from the smokers and so a law must be passed to prohibit them to smoke when walking.Smokers should smoke in proper site which is allowed to smoke >> Smokers should only smoke to proper places which they are allowed to. >> Smokers must only smoke to those authorized places asked by the government.

파워잉글리쉬 영어첨삭교정 서비스에 실제로 접수된 글입니다. 작성자와 글에 등장하는 사람·회사 이름, 연락처 등 개인을 알아볼 수 있는 정보는 모두 지웠습니다. 문법 오류는 학습 자료로서의 가치를 위해 원문 그대로 두었습니다.

다른 영어첨삭교정 보기

영어첨삭교정 ·