snow snow snow!! (3)
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Hi Dandyboy.
I’m happy for you because you had fun. I’ll talk to you again tomorrow/.
-RJ-
Today I played with my friend Lee-[이름]-[이름], Kim-min-su and Ahn-shi-hyeon.
>> Today, I played with my friends Lee-[이름]-[이름], Kim-min-su and Ahn-shi-hyeon.
We played using sleds.
>> Correct.
We didn't have place which is made to ride sleds but we made one.
>> We didn't have place to ride sleds, so we made one.
It's sort of a stairs but it's flat.
>> It's like a stair but it's flat.
Actually no stairs!! so we road sleds there.
>> Actually, it’s not like a stair but we still rode sleds there.
It's was so fun.
>> It was so fun!
I have the best record!!
>> I had the best record.
I slided very much using paper from the recycle place.
>> I slid a lot of times using recycled paper.
I used a hospital toy paper and it's great.
>> Correct.
Lee-[이름]-[이름] tried to get up and ride boards but he failed.
>> Lee-[이름]-[이름] tried to get up and rid boards, but he failed.
He slided and feel all the way down.
>> He slid and fell all the way down.
Still the all the way down is not so high or low, so no worries.
>> But there’s nothing to worry because he the way down isn’t that high.
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