Social media is becoming increasingly popular amongst all age groups. However, sharing personal info
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Yes. I am a one of the SNS users, too. I think social media give me big fun and it can make me happy. Because it can make me and m friends keep in touch for long times.
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>>> TEACHER GEMMA
Yes. I am a one of the SNS users, too.
>>> CORRECT
I think social media give me big fun and it can make me happy.
>>> I think social media gives me so much fun and it can make me happy.
Moreover, it can make me and my friends keep in touch for long times.
>>> CORRECT
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