Social Media Poison

2020-05-12 · 첨삭 강사 Ally

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I think social media is becoming toxic. First, most people try to take a picture or a video when they go to a memorable place, but they don\'t fully enjoy the moment. It means that social media users tend to be bothered about the comments online more than their real memory which can only remain through eyes, nose, mouth, ears, and hands. For example, there is a function called \"story\" on Instagram. By using \"story\", you can post what you want easily while not caring for a number of \"like\". Thus, many youths utilize this function and finally, they find themselves wanting to leave the moment online, not focusing on reality with their friends. Second, people are absorbed in the latest fashion on social media. They try to post a picture in a way that others do and they go to a place where is famous for lights that can help people to take a good selfie. Then they end up losing their personalities. Thus, people are becoming more and more addicted to social media based on these reasons.

강사 첨삭

I agree with you completely! ~~ 
Thank you for sharing your thoughts. 


~t. Ally


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I think social media is becoming toxic. First, most people try to take a picture or a video when they go to a memorable place, but they don\'t fully enjoy the moment. It means that social media users tend to be bothered about the comments online more than their real memory which can only remain through eyes, nose, mouth, ears, and hands. For example, there is a function called \"story\" on Instagram. By using \"story\", you can post what you want easily while not caring for a number of \"like\". Thus, many youths utilize this function and finally, they find themselves wanting to leave the moment online, not focusing on reality with their friends. Second, people are absorbed in the latest fashion on social media. They try to post a picture in a way that others do and they go to a place where is famous for lights that can help people to take a good selfie. Then they end up losing their personalities. Thus, people are becoming more and more addicted to social media based on these reasons.
>> CORRECT!

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