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I think that rules and laws are necessary for people to live without violence.
In fact, I believe that human nature is fundamentally evil.
In history, many people made war to get an authority.
To become a king, some people even killed their parents and brothers.
And some people killed many people who are not guilty to own other countries.
Therefore, rules and laws appeared to decrease the human nature of evil and maintain peace.
A crime still exists but thanks for rules and laws, we can live in peaceful world compared to the past.
Rules and laws are necessary to maintain peace but they shouldn’t violate privacy of people.
In conclusion, rules and laws should be applied with extent to not violate privacy.
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>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I think that rules and laws are necessary for people to live without violence.
>>> CORRECT
In fact, I believe that human nature is fundamentally evil.
In fact, I believe that human nature is fundamentally evil.
>>> CORRECT
In history, many people made war to get an authority.
In history, many people made war to get an authority.
>>> In history, many people had war to get an authority.
To become a king, some people even killed their parents and brothers.
To become a king, some people even killed their parents and brothers.
>>> CORRECT
And some people killed many people who are not guilty to own other countries.
And some people killed many people who are not guilty to own other countries.
>>> CORRECT
Therefore, rules and laws appeared to decrease the human nature of evil and maintain peace.
Therefore, rules and laws appeared to decrease the human nature of evil and maintain peace.
>>> CORRECT
A crime still exists but thanks for rules and laws, we can live in peaceful world compared to the past.
A crime still exists but thanks for rules and laws, we can live in peaceful world compared to the past.
>>> Crime still exists but thanks for the rules and laws, we can live in a more peaceful world compared to the past.
Rules and laws are necessary to maintain peace but they shouldn’t violate the privacy of the people.
Rules and laws are necessary to maintain peace but they shouldn’t violate the privacy of the people.
>>> CORRECT
In conclusion, rules and laws should be applied with extent to not violate privacy.
In conclusion, rules and laws should be applied with extent to not violate privacy.
>>> In conclusion, rules and laws should be applied to an extent that privacy won\'t violated.
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