Society is based on rules and laws. It could not function if individuals were free to do whatever th
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If there are no rules in society, I can\'t expect what will happen. There are freedom as a member of society such as freedom of speech, publication, assembly and religion. These freedom allow people to do most of things in their lives. If people keep the laws exactly, we don\'t have to make it and don\'t need to put people in the jail. However, there are always few people breaking the law due to their personal desire in any society. Many social activists insist that criminals can be prevented from the proper education rather send them to the jail. I partially agree with it because there are still a lot of crimes happened in the world even though all countries have their own law to prevent crimes which are different among the countries. In Korea, we haven\'t carried out death penalty for a long time even if there have been terrible murder crime happened frequently. Recently, it was shocked that criminals created sexual video of teenagers and shared it on the SNS. They also have threatened
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THANK GOD IT\'S FRIDAY MR. [이름]~! ^^
Fridays are so awesome that every day in the week should be Fridays.
Enjoy your studies!
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If there are no rules in society, I can\'t expect what will happen.
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There are freedom as a member of society such as freedom of speech, publication, assembly and religion.
>>> CORRECT
These freedom allow people to do most of things in their lives.
>>> These freedom allow people to do most of the things in their lives.
If people keep the laws exactly, we don\'t have to make it and don\'t need to put people in jail.
>>> CORRECT
However, there are always few people breaking the law due to their personal desire in any society.
>>> However, there are always a few people breaking the law due to their personal desire in the society.
Many social activists insist that criminals can be prevented from the proper education rather send them to the jail.
>>> Many social activists insist that criminals can be prevented from getting proper education rather sending them to jail.
I partially agree with it because there are still a lot of crimes happened in the world even though all countries have their own law to prevent crimes which are different among the countries.
>>> I partially agree with it because there are still a lot of crimes happening in the world even though all countries have their own law to prevent crimes which are different among countries.
In Korea, we haven\'t carried out death penalty for a long time even if there have been terrible murder crime happened frequently.
>>> In Korea, we haven\'t carried out death penalty for a long time even if there have been terrible murder crimes happening frequently.
Recently, it was shocked that criminals created sexual video of teenagers and shared it on the SNS.
>>> Recently, it was shocking that criminals created sexual video of teenagers and shared it on SNS.
They also have threatened...
>>> CORRECT
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