Some believe that the Olympic games help bring people from different nations together, while others
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The Olympic is the biggest world festival that brings people to host country and provide a chance to be unified all countries. To begin with this issue, I would like to discuss about the final goal of each government. Its reason of existence is to maximize their people\'s profits and keep safety environment. In fact, host country spend huge money to prepare the Olympic. However, there are a lot of positive effect if the ceremony finishes successfully. For instance, the host has to construct stadiums, accommodations and additional public transportation which are the valuable assets. People can utilize these facilities for their convenience and the host country will make huge money because participants spend money for their journey and all countries are willing to buy the right of broadcasting. In addition, it gives a great chance for international people to learn and exchange cultures, which strengthens bonds among different nations globally or even enhance a vulnerable relationship bet
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The Olympic is the biggest world festival that brings people to host country and provide a chance to be unified all countries.
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To begin with this issue, I would like to discuss about the final goal of each government.
>>> CORRECT
Its reason of existence is to maximize their people\'s profits and keep a safe environment.
>>> CORRECT
In fact, host country spend huge money to prepare the Olympic.
>>> In fact, the hosting country spends a huge money to prepare for the Olympics.
However, there are a lot of positive effects if the ceremony finishes successfully.
>>> CORRECT
For instance, the host has to construct stadiums, accommodations and additional public transportation which are valuable assets.
>>> CORRECT
People can utilize these facilities for their convenience and the host country will make a huge money because participants spend money for their journey and all countries are willing to buy the right of broadcasting.
>>> CORRECT
In addition, it gives a great chance for international people to learn and exchange cultures, which strengthens bonds among different nations globally or even enhance a vulnerable relationship among countries.
>>> CORRECT
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