Some friends you met on a trip want you to visit their country. You don\'t know much about the count

2025-03-06 · 첨삭 강사 Sharon

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I think I will go their country, even if there is risk involved. It can be new experience and I love to know the world I never met before. Regardless of how much I know, I can aware their culture step by step. I also care of danger, I need to be safe when I visit country I go first. However, My appetite of meeting new world is more bigger than being safe.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름] [이름]!
I love the ideas you have.
You know how to prioritize the reasons that you would include in your answer.
We just need to focus on vocabulary and sentence construction now.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
I think I will go their country, even if there is risk involved.
>> I think I will go to their country, even if there is risk involved.
It can be new experience and I love to know the world I never met before.
>> It can be a new experience and I love to learn about a world that I\'ve never known.
Regardless of how much I know, I can aware their culture step by step.
>> Regardless of how much I know, I can learn about their culture step by step.
I also care of danger, I need to be safe when I visit country I go first.
>> I also worry about danger, so I need to be safe when I visit a country for the first time.
However, My appetite of meeting new world is more bigger than being safe.
>> However, my desire to explore new cultures is greater than my concern for safety.


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