Some of the methods used in advertising are unethical and unacceptable in today’s society. To what e
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These days there are plenty of information which we cannot accept all amount of especially through advertisements, Many companies advertise their product through TV, online and so on, however sometimes it makes us unhappy because of ethical issues. This essay will discuss about the reason why people make unethical and unacceptable advertisements.
The main reason is that lots of companies are only focus on their profits by advertising with too much suggestive, aggressive and cruel contents. The reason for this is people more used to concentrate those contents than boring ideas. The companies want to catch people\'s attention within one minute, therefore they put those negative concepts in advertisement. For instance, when humanity organizations introduce their programme for donation, they show the vulnerable children who have serious problems with no anonymous and face protection. They are exposed their private lives and stuffs. In conclusion, I believe all
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Hi Ye [이름]!
I think I didn\'t receive your complete composition.
There is a limit when it comes to the length of the composition.
I suggest that you divide your essays into two different pages so that it would be more convenient.
I would reiterate the need for simpler and more direct sentences.
You should give the examiner an easier time in understanding your message.
You never want to confuse them.
Let\'s talk more about this in class.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
These days there are plenty of information which we cannot accept all amount of especially through advertisements,
>> These days, there is plenty of information which we cannot accept in their entirety especially those provided in advertisements.
Many companies advertise their product through TV, online and so on, however sometimes it makes us unhappy because of ethical issues.
>> Many companies advertise their products on TV, online and so on, however, they make us unhappy sometimes because of ethical issues.
This essay will discuss about the reason why people make unethical and unacceptable advertisements.
>> This essay will discuss the reason why people make unethical and unacceptable advertisements.
The main reason is that lots of companies are only focus on their profits by advertising with too much suggestive, aggressive and cruel contents.
The main reason is that lots of companies are only focus on their profits by advertising with too much suggestive, aggressive and cruel contents.
>> The main reason is that lots of companies only focus on their profits by advertising with too much suggestive, aggressive and cruel content.
The reason for this is people more used to concentrate those contents than boring ideas.
>> Their purpose is to get the people to concentrate more on that content than other boring ideas.
The companies want to catch people\'s attention within one minute, therefore they include those negative concepts in advertisement.
>> The companies want to catch people\'s attention within one minute, therefore, they include those negative concepts in the advertisement.
For instance, when humanity organizations introduce their programme for donation, they show the vulnerable children who have serious problems with no anonymous and face protection.
>> For instance, when charitable organizations introduce their program for donations, they show vulnerable children who have serious problems without protecting the latter\'s anonymity.
They are exposed their private lives and stuffs.
>> Their private lives are exposed for the world to see.
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