Some of the unethical and unacceptable methods used in advertising
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Increased use of media, Influences of advertising is also increasing so fastly. So, Influence of unethical advertising also increased in these days. For example, in this year, Korean beskin labins advertised icecream subjecting young girl to sexuality. for another example, there\'s some ads which has bad words or is too sexy. As influence of media is increasing, we have to make warning about unacceptable advertisments
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Hi Ju!
Thank you for your composition.
I hope that you will focus more on the organization of your thoughts.
The flow of your sentences must be smoother.
We will discuss more about it in class.
Thanks for the effort!^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
Increased use of media, Influences of advertising is also increasing so fastly.
>> Because of the different forms of media, the influence of advertising has also increased fast.
So, Influence of unethical advertising also increased in these days.
>> This is also true with the influences of unethical advertising.
For example, in this year, Korean beskin labins advertised icecream subjecting young girl to sexuality.
>> For example, this year, Korean Baskin Robbins advertised ice cream by focusing on the sexuality of a young girl.
for another example, there\'s some ads which has bad words or is too sexy.
>> Another example is an advertisement which uses bad words or words that are too sexy.
As influence of media is increasing, we have to make warning about unacceptable advertisments
>> As the reach of media extends, we have to be aware of unacceptable advertisements.
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