Some parents and teachers think that children’s behavior should be strictly controlled. While some t

2020-08-24 · 첨삭 강사 Gemma

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Children tend to behave like their parents. If parents didn\'t act right ways, their children would resemble parents. In these family, children are usually naughty and rude. They also behave uncourteously to elderly and don\'t care people around them. Professionals repeatably say that home schooling is the most important factor to build child\'s personality. However, it is not the best way to control children\'s behavior strictly. Children would like to behave badly if they catch that they are controlled from someone. It can cause adverse effect. In the period of adolescence, children are really sensitive, temperamental and depressed. They need special care at that time. Parents and teachers should not control students by force. They would rather having a conversation than educating them. If they refuse having a conversation, I think parents have to let them do whatever they want to. I think both ways are necessary for educating children so adults can use it according to the situations.

강사 첨삭

Good morning Mr. [이름]~! ^^ Thanks for your opinions and ideas when doing your homework. Keep it up~! ^^ Have a lovely week!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
Children tend to behave like their parents.
>>> CORRECT
 If parents didn\'t act right, their children would imitate their parents.
>>> CORRECT
 In these generations, children are usually naughty and rude. 
>>> CORRECT
They also behave uncourteous to the elderly and don\'t care people around them.
>>> CORRECT
 Professionals repeatably say that home schooling is the most important factor to build child\'s personality. 
>>> CORRECT
However, it is not the best way to control children\'s behavior strictly. 
>>> CORRECT
Children would like to behave badly if they catch that they are controlled from someone. 
>>> Children would like to behave badly if they knew that they are controlled by someone. 
It can cause adverse effect. 
>>> CORRECT
In the period of adolescence, children are really sensitive, temperamental and depressed.
>>> CORRECT
 They need special care at that time. 
>>> CORRECT
Parents and teachers should not control students by force. 
>>> CORRECT
They would rather having a conversation than educating them.
>>> They would rather have a conversation than educating them.
 If they refuse having a conversation, I think parents have to let them do whatever they want.
>>> CORRECT
 I think both ways are necessary for educating children so adults can use it according to the situations.
>>>  I think both ways are necessary to educate children so adults can use it according to the situations.

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