Some parents and teachers think that children\'s behavior should be strictly controlled. While some

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>>> TEACHER GEMMA

I think the balance between them is needed.

OR>>> I believe a balance between guidance and freedom is essential.

Some children\'s behaviors should be strictly controlled.

>>> CORRECT~!^^

For example, if selfish behaviors have negative effects on other people, it should be controlled.

>>> CORRECT~!^^

Except this situation, I think childrens should have be free to behave.

>>> Outside of such situations, I believe children should be free to express themselves and behave independently.

Parents should know that children are not their junior employees.

>>> CORRECT~!^^

Childrens should be respected presences.

>>> Children should be treated as individuals worthy of respect.

If parents try to control every behavior and thought about childrens, they might lose the strength of thought for themselves.

>>> If parents try to control every aspect of their children’s behavior and thoughts, the children may lose the ability to think independently for themselves.

I believe childrens who don\'t have their own opinions and judge for themselves can\'t become a real adult.

>>> I believe that children who lack their own opinions and the ability to make independent judgments cannot fully develop into responsible adults.

Therefore, one of the important parents\' roles is to make childrens think and judge for themselves.

>>> Therefore, one of the most important roles of parents is to encourage children to think critically and make their own decisions.