Some parents think giving children a small amount of money on a weekly basis is good, while other th
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There are individuals who believe that giving children a pocket money weekly is helpful to them. While other parents disagree with it. From my point of view, it has more beneficial for the children.On the one hand, they are not enough mature to manage their own money which is given by their parents. They can not control themselves as much as an adult can. So they could spend all their money on something that they actually do not need and easily get in a trouble such as smoking cigaret and drinking alcohol as they have some money.On the other hand, there is more advantages for giving the children a small amount of money regularly. It seems to me that I totally agree with it. It helps the children build their financial sense on their own. They can learn a value of money and how to save the money through managing money. Furthermore, It could be a good opportunity and practice as essencial financial education. Finally, I believe that it should be a good way of education beyond the concerns
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There are individuals who believe that giving children a pocket money weekly is helpful to them. While other parents disagree with it.
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From my point of view, it has more beneficial for the children.On the one hand, they are not enough mature to manage their own money which is given by their parents.
>>From my point of view, it has more benefits for the children. On the one hand, they are not fully matured to manage their own money given by their parents.
They can not control themselves as much as an adult can. So they could spend all their money on something that they actually do not need and easily get in a trouble such as smoking cigaret and drinking alcohol as they have some money.
>>They can not control themselves as much as an adult can. So, they could spend all their money on something that they actually do not need and easily get in a trouble such as smoking cigarette and drinking alcohol as they have some money.
On the other hand, there is more advantages for giving the children a small amount of money regularly.
>>On the other hand, there are more advantages for giving children a small amount of money regularly.
It seems to me that I totally agree with it. It helps the children build their financial sense on their own. They can learn a value of money and how to save the money through managing money.
>>It seems that I totally agree with it. It helps children build their financial sense on their own. They can learn the value of money and how to save money through managing it.
Furthermore, It could be a good opportunity and practice as essencial financial education. Finally, I believe that it should be a good way of education beyond the concerns
>>Furthermore, it could be a good opportunity to practice financial education. Finally, I believe that it should be a good way of educating children beyond concerns.
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