Some people are afraid to go out for fear of being robbed on the streets. Still, there are robberies
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1) First, it is very safe here to get around even at night and so I don’t think that it might not be concerns in our neighborhood. You know, when getting around late evening, I have a lot of experiences getting home safely even I’m wasted.
2) In order to keep our security, we have to check our door locked before leaving home. Of course, it has to be done as well when we are home. Further, it is not good for us to carry a lot of money with. It would be a target of a robber.
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1) First, it is very safe here to get around even at night and so I don’t think that it might not be concerns in our neighborhood.
>> First, it is very safe to get around here even at night, so I don’t think that it might not be a concern in our neighborhood.
You know, when getting around late evening, I have a lot of experiences getting home safely even I’m wasted.
>> You know, when getting around late in the evening, I have a lot of experiences getting home safely even though I’m wasted.
2) In order to keep our security, we have to check our door locked before leaving home.
>> You know, when getting around late in the evening, I have a lot of experiences getting home safely even though I’m wasted.
2) In order to keep our security, we have to check our door locked before leaving home.
>>In order to keep our security, we have to keep our door locked before leaving home.
Of course, it has to be done as well when we are home.
>>CORRECT!
Further, it is not good for us to carry a lot of money with. It would be a target of a robber.
>>Further, it is not good for us to carry a lot of money since it would be the target of a robber.
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