Some people are always in a hurry to go places and get things done. Other people prefer to take thei

2015-09-14 · 첨삭 강사 Charlie

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Since I'm very quick-tempered person, but I want to live more slow life. However if I did something very slowly, I feel anxiety. So eventually, I think in a hurry is goof for me than take my time and live life at slow pace. For example, we don't have enough money to do something. While foreign people get a lot of vacation from work; I heard my french friend that he has over 60 days off from work,but we only have 13 to 15 days vacation from work. Also we only have just 1 hour to break during whole day. During an hour we have to eat a lunch and take a rest even we drink coffee and brush our teeth. So we always need to hurry. And Moreover most of Koreans have impatient personality, so If we late to do something, people don't like it. Especially supervisor and client don't like to late. These are the reason why I think in hurry something is better then slow.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! ^^   Thank you for your A-1 composition. ^^ Wow, it\'s surprising to know you only have an hour break. That makes life pretty hectic. Usually, employees are given three breaks; 2 fifteen minute breaks (mid-morning and mid-afternoon) and the lunch hour. Anyway, your essay was very good that most of the corrections made were paraphrasing and reiterations to make the essay more eloquent. ^^   All good things, ==Teacher Charlie==     Since I\'m very quick-tempered person, but I want to live more slow life. >> Even though I\'m a very quick tempered person, I would like to lead a slower life.   However if I did something very slowly, I feel anxiety. So eventually, I think in a hurry is goof for me than take my time and live life at slow pace.>> However, if I did something very slowly, I feel anxious so I eventually I end up thinking that it is better for me to be in a hurry than taking my time and living life leisurely. For example, we don\'t have enough money to do something. While foreign people get a lot of vacation from work; I heard my french friend that he has over 60 days off from work,but we only have 13 to 15 days vacation from work. >> For example, we don\'t make enough money to do something so while foreigners get a lot of vacation time off work (e.g. my French friend told me he has over 60 days off work) we usually get only 13 to 15 vacation days off.   Also we only have just 1 hour to break during whole day. During an hour we have to eat a lunch and take a rest even we drink coffee and brush our teeth. So we always need to hurry. >> In addition, we only get an hour long break for the whole day. In that hour, we have to eat lunch, unwind, drink coffee and brush our teeth so we are always in a hurry. And Moreover most of Koreans have impatient personality, so If we late to do something, people don\'t like it. Especially supervisor and client don\'t like to late. >> Futhermore, most Koreans are characterized of being impatient so when we are late in doing something, people take offense in it. Supervisors and clients are the ones who are especially offended with tardiness. These are the reason why I think in hurry something is better then slow. >> These are the reasons why I think being in a hurry is better than slowing down.

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