Some people believe that a greater difference in age between parents and children is more beneficial

2021-01-11 · 첨삭 강사 Gemma

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I think disadvantage outweigh more than advantages. I prefer to the small gap between parents and children. There are two reason. First, they can keep good relationship like a friend. then, they share all most of their life for example school life, something to worry about and shopping Second, they can go to trip together. actually, I and my mom , pop enjoy traveling abroad. of course, the big gap age is also enjoying traveling however they tend to don\'t be well.

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>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I think the disadvantages outweigh the advantages.
>>> CORRECT
I prefer to the small gap between parents and children.
>>> I prefer the small gap between parents and children.
There are two reasons.
>>> CORRECT
First, they can keep a good relationship like friends.
>>> CORRECT
then, they share all most of their life for example school life, something to worry about and shopping
>>> Then, they share most of their life for example school life, wariness about and shopping.
Second, they can go on a trip together.
>>> CORRECT
actually, I and my mom , pop enjoy traveling abroad.
>>> Actually, I and my mom enjoy traveling abroad.
of course, the big gap age is also enjoying traveling however they tend to don\'t be well.
>>> Of course, the big age gap can also enjoy traveling however, but they tend not to do it well.

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