Some people believe that competitive sports have a positive effect on children's education, while ot
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Life is a series of competitions whether we want or not. Right after we are born, the competition begins. Even before we are born, competition starts when sperm fertilizes an egg. The competitive sports are exciting and give students an opportunity to learn the importance of fair competition, a sense of fulfillment and bouncing back from a loss to win in the future. Not only does it help kids stay in shape, learn focus and socialize but it also teaches them about working under pressure. Competition is about challenging yourself to improve. However, it is doubtful that these activities are always in the best interest of all kids. The world of competitive sports has a negative side. If not monitored, competitive sports and harm athletes physiologically, socially and physically. When the focus shifts from athleticism to winning, what was once an enjoyable and supportive activity can turn into a high-pressure and anxiety-filled job for a child. But competitive sports have more benefits.
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Hi Sir [이름]!
Happy hump day!
I am so happy that you always find time to do your essay.
The competition nowadays is really tough.
We should make time to improve yourselves to be better.
I hope that you are having a great time today.
See you in class.
Teacher Nina
Life is a series of competitions whether we want or not.
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Right after we are born, the competition begins.
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Even before we are born, competition starts when sperm fertilizes an egg.
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>> OR: Even before we are born, competition starts when the sperm fertilizes an egg.
The competitive sports are exciting and give students an opportunity to learn the importance of fair competition, a sense of fulfillment and bouncing back from a loss to win in the future.
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Not only does it help kids stay in shape, learn focus and socialize but it also teaches them about working under pressure.
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Competition is about challenging yourself to improve.
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However, it is doubtful that these activities are always in the best interest of all kids.
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The world of competitive sports has a negative side.
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If not monitored, competitive sports and harm athletes physiologically, socially and physically.
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When the focus shifts from athleticism to winning, what was once an enjoyable and supportive activity can turn into a high-pressure and anxiety-filled job for a child.
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But competitive sports have more benefits.
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