Some people believe that smart phones are destroying social interaction today. To what extent do you
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There were\'t anything to communicate with friends at home when I was teenager. I used to visit my friend\'s home without any notification and shouted his name to play with him. Telephone has been installed nationwide when I was about 16 years old. People didn\'t have any problem to communicate with neighbors and relatives. People used to sent mail to someone if there were important messages they would like to send, even though it took time. There were warm emotion among the people at that time. However, people just use their smartphone regardless of time and places. We can easily see many people who check their phone while they are commuting by public transportation. We can see a lot of people gathered at cafe and most people just look at their smart phone without any communication with someone who came into the cafe. Children also are addicted to use of it. Parents simply allow their children to use smart phone doing games or watching video because this is the best way to make children
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There wasn\'t anyone to communicate with at home when I was a teenager.
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I used to visit my friend\'s home without any notification and shouted his name to play with him.
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Telephone has been installed nationwide when I was about 16 years old.
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People didn\'t have any problem to communicate with neighbors and relatives.
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People used to sent mails to someone if there were important messages they would like to send, even though it took time.
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There were warm emotion among the people at that time.
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However, people just use their smartphone regardless of time and places.
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We can easily see many people who check their phone while they are commuting by public transportation.
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We can see a lot of people gathering at a cafe and most people just look at their smart phone without any communication with others who come into the cafe.
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Children also are addicted to use it.
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Parents simply allow their children to use smart phone doing games or watching video because this is the best way to make children...
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