Some people believe that the Earth is being harmed (damaged) by human activity.

2015-08-14 · 첨삭 강사 Charlie

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I think the Earth is being damaged by human activity. Most of all, under the development reason, we destroyed our planet. For example, the mountain is destroyed to build house for human. Even human kills animals very cruelly not for eat, but for accessory. Since this indiscriminate hunt, some animal are becoming endangered and nearing extinction. Human try to protect out planet, unfortunately it getting worse. For example, to preserve our natural resources such as oil, wood, gas and so on, we develop a nuclear power plant. however it is more dangerous and harm to nature and human. That's the reason why I think the Earth is being damaged by human.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! ^^ Great work in writing about human activity damaging the Earth. ^^ Your opinion was clearly expressed although, we need to work on using plural forms of nouns when talking about them in general. Also, let us remember to use our be verbs (i.e \"is\"). ^^   Excited to see you in class, ==Teacher Charlie==   I think the Earth is being damaged by human activity. >> CORRECT Most of all, under the development reason, we destroyed our planet. >> Most importantly, it is being destroyed because of urbanization.   For example, the mountain is destroyed to build house for human. >> For example, mountains get destroyed to be able to build houses for humans.   Even human kills animals very cruelly not for eat, but for accessory. >> Humans even kill animals viciously not for eating but for having accessories.   Since this indiscriminate hunt, some animal are becoming endangered and nearing extinction.>> These indiscriminate acts cause some animals to be endangered and near extinction. Human try to protect out planet, unfortunately it getting worse. >> Humans do try to protect our planet but unfortunately, it is getting worse.   For example, to preserve our natural resources such as oil, wood, gas and so on, we develop a nuclear power plant. however it is more dangerous and harm to nature and human.>> For example, to be able to preserve natural resources such as oil. wood, and others; we developed nuclear energy. However, it is more dangerous and harmful for humans and nature. That\'s the reason why I think the Earth is being damaged by human. >> These are the reasons why I think the Earth is being damaged by humans.

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