Some people believe the purpose of education should be helping the individual to become useful for s
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I think both of them is necessary for our society.
Society needs people who work for companies.
Well trained employees are very useful for companies, so when companies recruit their employees, they check applicants\' educational backgrounds.
Then it definitely means that education should be helping the individuals to become useful for society?
No. I think it should help individuals to achieve their ambitions because society needs employers as well as employees.
Some people should do their own businesses to develop our society.
After all, education is needed for people who want to work as useful employees for companies or people who want to achieve their ambitions by making their own businesses.
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Hi [이름]! Good evening. Thank you for taking the time to write and submit your essay, I can see the effort you put into it. You presented your ideas clearly, especially your point about the importance of both employees and entrepreneurs in society. That’s a strong and thoughtful perspective. Have a great weekend ahead!~^^
Society needs people who work for companies.
Well trained employees are very useful for companies, so when companies recruit their employees, they check applicants\' educational backgrounds.
No. I think it should help individuals to achieve their ambitions because society needs employers as well as employees.
Some people should do their own businesses to develop our society.
After all, education is needed for people who want to work as useful employees for companies or people who want to achieve their ambitions by making their own businesses.
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I think both of them are necessary for our society.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
Society needs people who work for companies.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
Well trained employees are very useful for companies, so when companies recruit their employees, they check applicants\' educational backgrounds.
CORRECT~!^^
Then it definitely means that education should be helping the individuals to become useful for society?
>>> CORRECT~!^^
No. I think it should help individuals to achieve their ambitions because society needs employers as well as employees.
>>> Not entirely. I believe education should also help individuals achieve their ambitions, because society needs not only employees but also employers.
Some people should do their own businesses to develop our society.
>>> Some people should start their own businesses to help develop society.
After all, education is needed for people who want to work as useful employees for companies or people who want to achieve their ambitions by making their own businesses.
>>> After all, education is important for both those who want to become valuable employees and those who want to achieve their ambitions by starting their own businesses.
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