Some people claim that the radiation from mobile phones causes brain damage. What is your opinion?
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I think that mobile phones can damage people. But I think that it doesn\'t have radiation. I think that the electromagnetic wave of phone damages people. Because phone is not related to radiation. Also, it must not produce radiation.
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I think that mobile phones can damage people. But I think that it doesn\'t have radiation.
>> I think that mobile phones can have negative side effects on people. But I believe that they don\'t have radiation.
I think that the electromagnetic wave of phone damages people. Because phone is not related to radiation.
>> I think that the electromagnetic wave of phones has adverse effects on people because phones are not related to radiation.
Also, it must not produce radiation.
>> Also, it doesn\'t produce radiation.
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