Some people encourage young children to leave their parents house as soon as they become adults whil

2020-07-31 · 첨삭 강사 Gemma

학생이 쓴 원문

I think that children should leave parents house when they reach 20 years old in my mind but I would like to live them as long as possible. Especially, Korean think that parents tend to do everything for their children even though they are already old enough. This is related with our culture and moral standard. We have learnt that young people should respect elderly and adults should support their children until they become independent economically. In addition, children are livening more dangerous society than I used to live. These environment makes parents protective to their children. So, I don\'t want my children to exposure a dangerous situation by living alone and I am worried what they will eat, how they do laundry and so on. They are not mature to do these household chores. In conclusion, I hope living with my children until they get married. I want to see every moment of child\'s growing.

강사 첨삭

Hi there Mr. [이름]~! Happy Friday! ^^ Thanks for doing your homework~! ^^ Keep it up and enjoy your weekend~! ^^
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I think that children should leave parents house when they reach 20 years old in my mind but I would like to live them as long as possible.
>>> I think children should leave their parents house when they reached 20 years old but I would like to live with them as long as possible.
 Especially, Koreans think that parents tend to do everything for their children even though they are already old enough. 
>>> CORRECT
This is related with our culture and moral standard. 
>>> CORRECT
We have learnt that young people should respect the elderly and adults should support their children until they become independent economically. 
>>> CORRECT
In addition, children are livening more dangerous society than I used to live.
>>> In addition, children are living in a  more dangerous society than it used to live. 
 These environment makes parents protective to their children.
 >>>These circumstance makes parents become protective of their children.
 So, I don\'t want my children to exposure a dangerous situation by living alone and I am worried what they will eat, how they do laundry and so on. 
>>>  So, I don\'t want my children to be exposed in a dangerous situation by living alone and I am worried what they will eat, how would they do the laundry and so on. 
They are not mature to do these household chores. 
>>> CORRECT
In conclusion, I hope to live with my children until they get married. 
>>> CORRECT
I want to see every moment of child\'s growing.
>>> CORRECT

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