Some people encourage young children to leave their parents house as soon as they become adults whil
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Parents in Korea don\'t want to live with their children even if children become adults. Because we are not sure if children can eat their meals well, do laundry and clean up their room. Parents worry about everything regarding their children even though they are already adult. One of the representative example about parent\'s concern is house where their children will stay someday. In my knowledge, most parents would like to prepare the house for their children. They think that it is the obligation of parents. I have same idea as the other parents, I think we were educated morally, but it is was not intended. We learnt it while we were living with family since we were born.
A part of me, I really want my children to leave me as soon as they grow up enough. However, I can\'t expect anything about my future, I might regret what I decide. I might lose my chance to live my children until they grow up. So I am not sure what is the best way for me and my children.
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Parents in Korea don\'t want to live with their children even if children become adults.
>>> Parents in Korea don\'t want their children to leave even if their children become adults. (live vs. leave) :)
Because we are not sure if children can eat their meals well, do laundry and clean up their room.
>>> Because we are not sure if our children can eat their meals well, do their laundry and clean up their rooms.
Parents worry about everything regarding their children even though they are already adult.
>>>Parents worry everything about their children even if they are already adults.
One of the representative example about parent\'s concern is house where their children will stay someday.
>>> One of the examples about parent\'s concern is the house where their children could stay someday.
In my knowledge, most parents would like to prepare the house for their children.
>>> CORRECT
They think that it is the obligation of parents.
>>> CORRECT
I have same idea as the other parents, I think we were educated morally, but it is was not intended.
>>> I have the same idea as the other parents, I think we were educated morally, but it is was not intended.
We learnt it while we were living with our family since we were born.
>>> CORRECT
A part of me, I really want my children to leave me as soon as they are old up enough.
>>> CORRECT
However, I can\'t expect anything about my future, I might regret what I decide.
>>> CORRECT
I might lose my chance to live with my children until they grow up.
>>> CORRECT
So I am not sure what is the best way for me and my children.
>>> CORRECT
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