Some people like to do only what they already do well. Other people prefer to try new things and tak
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I prefer to try new things than to do only what I already do well, but I don't want to take too much risk.
Since I'm very curious person, so I can't bear boring thinks. Even can't do same things continuously. That's the reason why I work in advertising agency. The work is very hard and tough, I can experience various brands and products.
Also, whatever I try to do new things, I'm able to learn various things and to attribute to this personality my background knowledge is getting broad.
However, I also have an anxiety, so I don't want to take too much risk. So I try what I can do well. For example, I'm good at make something, so I try to learn making a various handcrafts.
These are the reason why I prefer to try new things than to do only what I already do well.
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Hello there [이름]! ^^
We are so much alike! I too can\'t stand boring and routine activities so I try out something new, become good at it and move on to the next. ㅋㅋㅋ
Check out the corrections though especially the second one wherein making use of compound and complex sentences saves a lot of time. It\'s better to combine multiple simple sentences using conjunctions or the semicolon punctuation mark. ^^
Good work all in all!
All good things,
==Teacher Charlie==
I prefer to try new things than to do only what I already do well, but I don\'t want to take too much risk.>> I prefer to trying out new things rather than doing what I can already do well, but I don\'t want to risk too much.
Since I\'m very curious person, so I can\'t bear boring thinks. Even can\'t do same things continuously. That\'s the reason why I work in advertising agency. The work is very hard and tough, I can experience various brands and products. >> Since I\'m a very curious person, I can\'t bear boring thoughts nor routine activities. That\'s the reason why I work in advertising; although the job is difficult and challenging, I can experience working with various brands and products.
Also, whatever I try to do new things, I\'m able to learn various things and to attribute to this personality my background knowledge is getting broad.>>Also, whenever I try to do new things, I\'m able to accumulate various information and to add to that, my background knowledge also broadens.
However, I also have an anxiety, so I don\'t want to take too much risk. So I try what I can do well. For example, I\'m good at make something, so I try to learn making a various handcrafts. >> However, I also have an anxiety in risking too much so I try to improve on what I can already do well. For example, I\'m good at making something so I try to learn how to make various handicrafts.
These are the reason why I prefer to try new things than to do only what I already do well.
>> These are the reasons why I prefer to try to do new things rather than what I can already do well.
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