Some people like to do only what they already do well. Other people prefer to try new things and tak

2015-11-08 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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I think I’m somewhat in between in challenging new things. I’m not a person who proactively challenge new things, neither a person who likes to stay as it is. Although there are a few people who prefer to try new things, it is quite natural that the majority of people tend to do things they already do well and instinctively resist to changes. That’s why leaders of any organizations like a country or a company emphasize a change because people don't like it. Whenever we have an election for a president or parliament members, number one pledge that politicians make is reforms or changes. Like other general people, I also don’t like changes. However, if you continue to stay or are stuck without moving, you’ll be deteriorated and become incompetent. A change requires your efforts, time, and strong will. You cannot develop or grow further if you are afraid of changes. Changes take a risk as well. So, I try to break the shell and keep challenging new things even though it is painful.

강사 첨삭

Hello there Sir [이름]!

How are you? Did you have a good weekend?

I hope you did. In my case, I just went to the supermarket and took a rest.

Like what you mentioned, changes are difficult when it is done abruptly.

For example, rules in school or in the office.

Thanks for your time.
Hope that you\'ll have enough rest tonight.
See you.
Teacher Nina


I think I’m somewhat in between in challenging new things.

>> CORRECT

I’m not a person who proactively challenge new things, neither a person who likes to stay as it is.

>> CORRECT

Although there are a few people who prefer to try new things, it is quite natural that the majority of people tend to do things they already do well and instinctively resist to changes.

>> CORRECT

That’s why leaders of any organizations like a country or a company emphasize a change because people don\'t like it.

>> CORRECT

Whenever we have an election for a president or parliament members, number one pledge that politicians make is reforms or changes.

>> Whenever we have an election for a president or parliament members, number one pledge that politicians make are reforms or changes.

>> OR: Whenever we have an election for a president or parliament members, they usually make new platforms for the betterment of the country.

Like other general people, I also don’t like changes.

>> CORRECT

However, if you continue to stay or are stuck without moving, you’ll be deteriorated and become incompetent.

>> However, if you continue to stay or are stuck without moving, you’ll deteriorate and become incompetent. 

A change requires your efforts, time, and strong will.

>> CORRECT

You cannot develop or grow further if you are afraid of changes.

>> CORRECT

Changes take a risk as well.

>> CORRECT

So, I try to break the shell and keep challenging new things even though it is painful.

>> CORRECT

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