Some people say that a person’s success is as a result of the way he has been brought up by his pare
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I partially agree that parent\'s discipline or the way parents bring up affect children\'s success. \"Efforts will never betray you\" is well known saying in Korea. It means that efforts is the most important factor to determine if we can be successful in the future. People would like to be successful tend to read a book about successful people and try to imitate them. I think that home education is important and affect to children\'s growth. To make children\'s good habit depends on parent\'s way of education. However, putting an effort is also important as home schooling. There are a lot of factors to be successful such as efforts, habits, patience, goals and so on. I think that parents discipline is one of the elements affected children\'s life.
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>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I partially agree that parent\'s discipline or the way parents bring up their children affects their success.
>>> CORRECT
\"Efforts will never betray you\" is well known saying in Korea.
>>> \"Efforts will never betray you\" it is a well known saying in Korea.
It means that efforts is the most important factor to determine if we can be successful in the future.
>>> CORRECT
People who would like to be successful tend to read books about successful people and try to imitate them.
>>> CORRECT
I think that home education is important and affect to children\'s growth.
>>> I think, home education is important and it affects the children\'s growth.
>>> CORRECT
To make children\'s good habit depends on parent\'s way of education.
>>> To teach children have good habits depends on their parent\'s way of education.
However, putting an effort is also important as home schooling.
>>> CORRECT
There are a lot of factors to be successful such as efforts, habits, patience, goals and so on.
>>> CORRECT
I think that parents discipline is one of the elements affected children\'s life.
>>> I think, parents discipline is one of the elements affecting the children\'s life.
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