Some people say that all popular TV entertainment programs should aim to educate viewers about impor
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I don\'t agree with it because viewers have a right to select what we want to watch. The broadcasting company must offer various TV programs for views. Some people expressed the concern about the power of TV that might cause adverse effect to viewers. Especially, teenagers tend to imitate what celebrities do on TV. So, I think TV show has to be marked the proper ages that can watch it or ask viewers to confirm their certification that they are adults. My son always ask me to not to watch news because we can see a lot of criminal events from the news. He express that he would feel frustrated if he watch violent scenes and crimes. Even though, broadcasting company filter their programs on various ways, people can watch anything on YouTube. It has created many problem these day. We have to discuss about the best way to control all kind of media. I believe that most media help us in various field. Video materials are the most effective ones when we learn something. Proper regulation needs
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I don\'t agree with it because viewers have a right to select what we want to watch.
>>> I don\'t agree with it because viewers have the right to select what they want to watch.
The broadcasting company must offer various TV programs for views.
>>> The broadcasting company must offer various TV programs for viewing.
Some people expressed the concern about the power of TV that might cause adverse effect to viewers.
>>> Some people expressed their concerns about the power of TV that might cause adverse effect to viewers.
Especially, teenagers tend to imitate what celebrities do on TV.
>>> CORRECT
So, I think TV show has to be marked the proper ages that can watch it or ask viewers to confirm their certification that they are adults.
>>> So, I think TV shows have to be indicate the proper ages that can watch it or ask viewers to confirm their certification that they are adults.
My son always ask me to not to watch news because we can see a lot of criminal events from the news.
>>> My son always asks me not to watch news because we can see a lot of criminal events from the news.
He expresses that he would feel frustrated if he watch violent scenes and crimes.
>>> CORRECT
Even though, broadcasting company filter their programs on various ways, people can watch anything on YouTube.
>>> CORRECT
It has created many problem these day.
>>> It has created many problems these days.
We have to discuss about the best way to control all kind of media.
>>> We have to discuss about the best ways to control all kinds of media.
I believe that most media help us in various field.
>>> CORRECT
Video materials are the most effective ones when we learn something.
>>> CORRECT
Proper regulation needs...
>>> CORRECT
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