Some people say that art subjects such as music, drama and creative writing are an essential part of
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I was not good at art subjects when I was student. Personally, I don\'t want to learn about arts because I am not interested in it and don\'t have talent it. However, many students dream that they want to become a musician, actor or comedian. For them, school have to educate art subjects because we don\'t know who are interested in these subjects and talented. I didn\'t have dream when I was young and most friends of me were same. It was common phenomenon that students didn\'t have their dream under the previous education system. We were forced to memorize something which teacher told us even if it was not helpful for us and were tested what teacher taught us. I don\'t have any ideas about current education system but I am sure it has changed a lot compare to previous system. I would like to believe that students can find their dreams while they are studying at school. So, it would be better attend the special school if students found their aptitude. I think we implement select and concentra
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Hi Mr. [이름]~! A happy day to you~! ^^ The secret of motivated people is their ability to do something about it and make things happen. Have a good one~!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I was not good at arts when I was a student.
>>> CORRECT
Personally, I don\'t want to learn about arts because I am not interested in it and don\'t have a talent it.
>>> CORRECT
However, many students dream to become a musician, an actor or a comedian.
>>> CORRECT
For them, school have to educate art subjects because we don\'t know who are interested in these subjects and talented.
>>> For them, schools have to teach arts because we don\'t know who are interested in these subjects and talented.
I didn\'t have dream when I was young and most friends of me were same.
>>> I didn\'t have a dream when I was young and most friends of me were the same.
It was common phenomenon that students didn\'t have their dream under the previous education system.
>>> It was a common phenomenon for students not having dreams under the previous education system.
We were forced to memorize something which the teacher told us even if it was not helpful for us and were tested what teacher taught us.
>>> >>> CORRECT
I don\'t have any ideas about the current education system but I am sure it has changed a lot compare to the previous system.
>>> CORRECT
I would like to believe that students can find their dreams while they are studying at school.
>>> CORRECT
So, it would be better to attend the special school if students found their aptitude.
>>> CORRECT
I think we can implement,select and concentrate on it.
>>> CORRECT
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