Some people say that marriage is outdated (too old-fashioned and not needed), do you agree or disagr
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I heard that it is common to live together not to marry in Europe.
>>I heard that it is common to live together and not to get married in Europe.
So some people think it is not essential to marry because they already live that.
>>So some people think it is not essential to get married because they already live together.
However, I think marriage is needed because many countries including Korea don’t yet have the legal system about cohabitating.
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>>Moreover, marriage is a must because in some countries their is no ordinance on cohabitating.
Countries like France, Germany and Sweden already have equipped well the legal system about cohabitating.
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Their countries treat cohabiting couples and marring couples equally.
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Thus they don’t feel inconvenient or discrimination about cohabiting instead of marriage.
>>Thus, they don’t feel inconvenient or discrimination about cohabiting instead of marriage.
Also, social recognition is positive.
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>>Also, it\'s acceptable in the society.
If the legal system about cohabiting is equipped well like that countries, marriage is not needed.
>> If the legal system about cohabiting is equipped well like these countries, marriage is not needed.
However, if it is not equipped, marriage is needed because it is measure which country protect these people socially.
>>However, if it is not equipped, marriage is needed because it is measure which country protects these people socially.
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