Some people say that men age better than women, and remain attractive longer. Do you agree?
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It is an age-old question, do men age better than women? It's an endless debate, and since there are so many variables to consider you can't definitively say one way or the other. However, people generally think that men age better than women. This is because, I think, women reach their peak at the age of 20 or so, definitely less than 30 at the maximum, when it comes to their beauty. Women begin to blossom in their late 10’s and are in full blossom in their early 20’s. Whereas men tend to come into blossom in their mid or late 20’s, a bit later than women. Moreover, men do not change a lot over time, while girls become more beautiful every day when they grow and when they pass their peak, their beauty decay suddenly like flowers do. In addition, as men get older, even their wrinkles and grey hairs look attractive. It is because experience looks good on men, but women are expected to stay physically young, which is the way we perceive. But don't worry. Women outlive men. It's fair.
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It is an age-old question, do men age better than women?
>> Correct!
It\'s an endless debate, and since there are so many variables to consider you can\'t definitively say one way or the other.
>> Correct! ( spelling check: definitely ^^)
>> OR: It\'s an endless question, and since there are so many variables to consider you can\'t definitely say one way or the other.
However, people generally think that men age better than women.
>> Correct!
This is because, I think, women reach their peak at the age of 20 or so, definitely less than 30 at the maximum, when it comes to their beauty.
>> Correct!
Women begin to blossom in their late 10’s and are in full blossom in their early 20’s.
>> Correct!
Whereas men tend to come into blossom in their mid or late 20’s, a bit later than women.
>> Correct!
Moreover, men do not change a lot over time, while girls become more beautiful every day when they grow and when they pass their peak, their beauty decay suddenly like flowers do.
>> Moreover, men do not change a lot overtime, while girls become more beautiful every day when they grow and when they pass their peak, their beauty suddenly fades like flowers do.
In addition, as men get older, even their wrinkles and grey hairs look attractive.
>> Correct!
It is because experience looks good on men, but women are expected to stay physically young, which is the way we perceive.
>> Correct!
But don\'t worry. Women outlive men. It\'s fair.
>> Correct!
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