Some people think it is important to spend a lot of money on a wedding celebration, while others dis

2020-06-16 · 첨삭 강사 Gemma

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If I am an billionaire, I am willing to spend a lot of money for my wedding celebration. However, most people can not afford to pay for it. Especially, women would like to be special and they want to show off their abilities such as personal connections, assets and social status. My wife also wanted to have special wedding, so she prepared many things by herself. She didn\'t want to spend a lot of money, but she would like to hold fancy wedding with minimum budget. I have same thought at that time, but I don\'t want to spend money for my wedding now. It would better spending money for my honeymoon rather than using it for wedding. I can also purchase home appliances if I could save money on my wedding day. For me, I have a different thought before and after wedding celebration. However, If I got married again, I would have small wedding celebration and would spend money in another way. In addition, if celebrities or rich people donate their money to poor people, it would be valuable exp

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Good morning Mr. [이름]~! ^^ Thank you for always doing your homework~! It\'s never too late for you to be a billionaire yet. Keep going and manage your finances well. kkkk :D See you~!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
If I were a billionaire, I am willing to spend a lot of money for my wedding celebration. 
>>> CORRECT
However, most people can not afford to pay for it.
>>> CORRECT
Especially, women would like to be special and they want to show off their abilities such as personal connections, assets and social status.
>>> CORRECT
My wife also wanted to have a special wedding, so she prepared many things by herself. 
>>> CORRECT
She didn\'t want to spend a lot of money, but she would like to hold a fancy wedding with minimum budget.
>>> CORRECT
 I have same thought at that time, but I don\'t want to spend money for my wedding now. 
>>>  I have the same thought at that time, but I don\'t want to spend money for my wedding now. 
It would better spending money for my honeymoon rather than using it for wedding.
>>> It would better spend money for my honeymoon rather than using it for wedding.
 I can also purchase home appliances if I could save money on my wedding day. 
>>> CORRECT
For me, I have a different thought before and after the wedding celebration.
>>> CORRECT
 However, if I got married again, I would have a simple wedding celebration and would spend money in other things .
>>> CORRECT
 In addition, if celebrities or rich people donate their money to poor people, it would be valuable.
>>> CORRECT

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