Some people think it is important to spend a lot of money on a wedding celebration, while others dis
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I have seen the wedding celebration of Indian in the UAE. He rent the whole golf clubs and had a party for his wedding. I heard that it was costed 3 hundred million won. I couldn\'t understand why people would like to spend money for a day that would be gone. But I was really wondering what they did in the party. Unfortunately, It was not allowed to enter the party for someone who was not invited. If I would like to participate, I had to show the invitation letter. However, I could hear the song by singing a famous singer in India, and I could see a lot of food around the golf club. It looked like a concert and unbelievable party. I just felt envy him at that time. If I were him, could I spend money like him? I am not sure if I can have a amazing party. It would be wonderful and rememberable. But I would rather spend money for people who have a hard time to get food, water and houses. I think it would be better to donate money for poor people . If so, I would be happier than having
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>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I have seen the wedding celebration of Indian in the UAE.
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He rented the whole golf clubs and had a party for his wedding.
>>> CORRECT
I heard that it was costed 3 hundred million won.
>>> I heard that it cost 3 hundred million won.
I couldn\'t understand why people would like to spend money for a day that would be gone.
>>> CORRECT
But I was really wondering what they did in the party.
>>> CORRECT
Unfortunately, It was not allowed to enter the party for someone who was not invited.
>>> Unfortunately, it was not allowed to enter the party for people who are not invited.
If I would like to participate, I had to show an invitation letter.
>>> CORRECT
However, I could hear the song sang by a famous singer in India, and I could see a lot of food around the golf club.
>>> CORRECT
It looked like a concert and an unbelievable party.
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I just felt envy him at that time.
>>> I just felt envious at him that time.
If I were him, could I spend money like him?
>>> CORRECT
I am not sure if I can have an amazing party.
>>> CORRECT
It would be wonderful and rememberable.
>>> It would be wonderful and memorable.
But I would rather spend money for people who have a hard time getting food, water and houses.
>>> CORRECT
I think it would be better to donate money for poor people .
>>> CORRECT
If so, I would be happier than having...
>>> CORRECT
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