Some people think that children should go to kindergarten before attending primary school, while oth
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In recent society, parents need to hire someone or ask their parents to take care of their children because they work together. In this environment, we have two choice, one is letting children stay at home and the other is sending them to kindergarten. I have seen a lot of married women who would like to quit their job because they feel sorry to their children due to their busy schedule. Most parents only can spend few time with family after work that would be late evening because of the overtime work and traffic jam in the downtown. The general price in my country hike every year. On the other hand, salary in every household hasn\'t risen like price. If both couple don
\'t work together, they will have a financial problem. These are major reason why parents send their children to the kindergarten. Secondly, children attend the pre-school for education purpose. Obsession in education also lead parents to send their children to private school and institute.
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Hi there Mr. [이름]~! ^^ It\'s another day to enjoy~! “Your time is limited, don’t waste it living someone else’s life. Don’t be trapped by dogma, which is living the result of other people’s thinking. Don’t let the noise of other’s opinion drowned your own inner voice. And most important, have the courage to follow your heart and intuition, they somehow already know what you truly want to become. Everything else is secondary.” - Steve Jobs
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
In recent society, parents need to hire someone or ask their parents to take care of their children because they both work.
>>> CORRECT
In this environment, we have two choices, one is letting children stay at home and the other is sending them to kindergarten.
>>> CORRECT
I have seen a lot of married women who would like to quit their job because they feel sorry for their children due to their busy schedule.
>>> CORRECT
Most parents only can spend a few time with their family after work that would be late evening because of the overtime work and traffic jam in the downtown.
>>> CORRECT
The general price in my country hikes every year.
>>> CORRECT
On the other hand, salary in every household hasn\'t risen like price.
>>> On the other hand, salary in every household hasn\'t risen like the prices of goods.
If both couple don\'t work, they will have a financial problem.
>>> CORRECT
These are major reasons why parents send their children to the kindergarten.
>>> CORRECT
Secondly, children attend the pre-school for education purposes.
>>> CORRECT
Obsession in education also leads the parents to send their children to private school and institute.
>>> CORRECT
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