Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others beli
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I think the balance between them is necessary.
We are living in a competitive world.
To enter popular university and work in a company that gives us high salary, we should do competition.
Even if we start working in a company we wanted to work, to be promoted we should do competition with our colleagues.
However, if we always think our colleagues as competitors, the life in a company won\'t be fun.
Cooperation with colleagues is necessary for us to enjoy our daily life.
Proper cooperation makes us relieve stress on our work because we have chance to get advice from our colleagues when we suffer from working.
In conclusion, we live maintaining the balance between them in our life.
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Happy Friday [이름]~! ^^As the week winds down, take a moment to reflect on what you’ve accomplished, let go of what’s left behind, and embrace the weekend ahead. May your Friday be filled with positivity, small joys, and a well-deserved sense of achievement.
We are living in a competitive world.
To enter popular university and work in a company that gives us high salary, we should do competition.
Even if we start working in a company we wanted to work, to be promoted we should do competition with our colleagues.
However, if we always think our colleagues as competitors, the life in a company won\'t be fun.
Cooperation with colleagues is necessary for us to enjoy our daily life.
Proper cooperation makes us relieve stress on our work because we have chance to get advice from our colleagues when we suffer from working.
In conclusion, we live maintaining the balance between them in our life.
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I think the balance between them is necessary.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
We are living in a competitive world.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
To enter popular university and work in a company that gives us high salary, we should do competition.
>>> To get into a prestigious university and work for a company that offers a high salary, we need to compete.
Even if we start working in a company we wanted to work, to be promoted we should do competition with our colleagues.
>>> Even if we start working at a company we have always wanted to join, we still need to compete with our colleagues.
However, if we always think our colleagues as competitors, the life in a company won\'t be fun.
>>> However, if we always view our colleagues as competitors, life at the company can become unenjoyable.
Cooperation with colleagues is necessary for us to enjoy our daily life.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
Proper cooperation makes us relieve stress on our work because we have chance to get advice from our colleagues when we suffer from working.
>>> Proper cooperation helps reduce stress because it gives us the chance to receive advice and support from our colleagues when we face challenges at work.
In conclusion, we live maintaining the balance between them in our life.
>>> In conclusion, we need to maintain a balance between competition and cooperation in our professional lives.
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