Some people think that facing challenges improves a person. Do you agree or disagree?
학생이 쓴 원문
Facing challenges relate with taking risks. I believe that challenges definitely improve a person and it makes life worth. We might feel bored, if there is no changes in life. We also can\'t not be improved without any failure. There is saying that failure is the mother of success\". Many people are afraid of taking a risk because they are satisfied with their status, so they don\'t want to face challenges.
However, people who take a risk can only be successful. It can be controversial that facing challenges improve a person.
People who object it can insist that what if we lose everything, what if we can\'t recover from the risks. I would say if there are someone who are struggle from their failure, government have to provide the recovery program such as providing money and education.
Then people will give it a try for many field, so our society will improve.
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Hi there Mr. [이름]~! ^^ Thanks for doing your essay! Keep it up!
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Facing challenges relate with taking risks.
>>> Facing challenges related to taking risks.
I believe that challenges definitely improve a person and it makes life worth it.
>>> CORRECT~!
We might feel bored, if there is no changes in life.
>>> We might feel bored, if there are no changes in life.
We also can\'t not be improved without any failure.
>>> We also can\'t improved without any failures.
There is saying that failure is the mother of success\".
>>> There is a saying that goes \"failure is the mother of success\".
Many people are afraid of taking the risk because they are satisfied with their status, so they don\'t want to face challenges.
>>> CORRECT~!
However, people who take a risk can only be successful.
>>> However, people who take the risk can be successful.
It can be controversial that facing challenges improve a person.
>>> It could be controversial that facing challenges improve a person.
People who object it can insist that what if we lose everything, what if we can\'t recover from the risks.
>>> People who object can insist that if we lose everything and can\'t recover from the risks.
I would say if there are someone who are struggle from their failure, government have to provide the recovery program such as providing money and education.
>>> I would say if there are someone who are struggling from failing, the government has to provide the recovery program such as providing money and education.
Then people will give it a try for many fields, so our society will improve.
Then people will give it a try for many fields, so our society will improve.
>>> CORRECT~!
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