Some people think that high salary is important when choosing a company to work for, while others th

2020-06-24 · 첨삭 강사 Gemma

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Unemployment is major social issues that we have to solve along with Covid-19 pandemic. As unemployment rate is high, Job seekers don\'t consider salary, working atmosphere and so on. People just want to get a job if there are vacancies in any companies. As people get older, they usually receive more salary than young people. However, aging people have to prepare for money which they will use it after they retire. If people are not well prepared, government need to support them, but it is nearly impossible because there are less young people than old people. All taxes are coming from workers who might be young people and their population is not enough to support old people and children. Although, job seekers don\'t care all factors regarding company, I think they have to working environment first and then they would better think about salary. However, I think the most important thing when we choose a company is colleagues who are working with. People make everything involving atmosphe

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Hi Mr. [이름]~! Thank you for doing your homework~ ^^ Focus on good thoughts and good things will happen. Happy Wednesday stay positive. Think positive. Do positive.
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>>> TEACHER GEMMA
Unemployment is a major social issue that we have to solve along with Covid-19 pandemic.
>>> CORRECT
As unemployment rate is high, job seekers don\'t consider the salary, working atmosphere and so on.
>>> CORRECT
 People just want to get a job if there are vacancies in any companies. 
>>> CORRECT
As people get older, they usually receive more salary than young people.
>>> CORRECT
 However, aging people have to prepare for money which they will use after they retire. 
>>> CORRECT
If people are not well prepared,  the government need to support them, but it is nearly impossible because there are less young people than old ones.
>>> CORRECT
 All taxes are coming from workers who might be young people and their population is not enough to support the old people and children.
>>> CORRECT
 Although, job seekers don\'t care all factors regarding company, I think they have to consider the working environment first and then they would better think about salary. 
>>> CORRECT
However, I think the most important thing when we choose a company is colleagues who we can work with. 
>>> CORRECT
People must consider everything including the work atmosphere. 
>>> CORRECT

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