Some people think that human needs for farmland, housing, and industry are more important than savin

I disagree that the needs for farmland, housing, and industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals. Most of all, we can develop all these thing, unfortunately we can't make animals or nature. It is easy to destroy all the nature things such as animals, mountains, river etc. However it is hard to retrieve it. If we continue to develop to make farmland, house and industry facilities, a that time we feel comfortable to live, but after a long time, we suffer from exhaustion of nature sources. Second, although we don't realize some animals do very important work to make a balance between nature and human. Since the tiger disappeared in Korea mountain, the number of wild pigs are dramatically increasing, sometimes they attack people. These are the reason why I disagree that the needs for farmland, housing, and industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals.

Thank you for your very insightful essay [이름]! ^^   It is always a joy for me to read and alter your essay. ^^ I didn\'t know there were tigers in Korea back then but thank you for the trivia. ^^ Most of the corrections made were simple reiterations but this one stands out; Be careful in using ordinal numbers to list reasons. For example, if the list starts with the phrase \"Most importantly\" or something similar, the next item on the list should be introduced as \"Next\" or something similar. On the other hand, if it starts with \"First\" then the next reason would be introduced with \"Second\".   Good work all in all. ^^   All good things, ==Teacher Charlie==       I disagree that the needs for farmland, housing, and industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals.>>CORRECT Most of all, we can develop all these thing, unfortunately we can\'t make animals or nature. >> First of all, yes, we can develop these things but unfortunately, we cannot make animals nor nature.   It is easy to destroy all the nature things such as animals, mountains, river etc. However it is hard to retrieve it.  >> It is easy to destroy all of nature such as animals, mountains, rivers, etc. but it is hard to recover it.   If we continue to develop to make farmland, house and industry facilities, a that time we feel comfortable to live, but after a long time, we suffer from exhaustion of nature sources. >> If we continue developing farmlands, houses and industy facilities, it would be more comfortable for us to live but soon after, we would also suffer from the exhaustion of nature sources. Second, although we don\'t realize some animals do very important work to make a balance between nature and human. >> Second, although we don\'t realize it, some animals play an important role in making a balance between humans and nature.   Since the tiger disappeared in Korea mountain, the number of wild pigs are dramatically increasing, sometimes they attack people.>> For example, since the disappearance of the tiger in the mountains of Korea, the numer of wild pigs dramatically increased and have since then attacked people. These are the reason why I disagree that the needs for farmland, housing, and industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals. >> These are the reasons why I disagree that the needs farmland, housing, and industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals.