Some people think that poverty is the reason behind most crimes. Do you agree or disagree?
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I don\'t agree that the poverty is the main reason behind most crimes.
>> I don\'t agree that poverty is the main reason behind most crimes.
We can find everywhere that the rich can be criminal even though all they have.
>> We can find everywhere that the rich can be criminals even though they have all/everything.
Sometimes their crimes are more atrocious and more clever.
>> Correct
The crimes committed by the poor are usually robbery, theft and deliquences which are scaled-down crimes.
>> Correct
Those are occured because of environmental influence which doesn\'t leave much choice for the poor or which doesn\'t make them to tell what is wrong or right.
>> Those occured because of environmental influence which doesn\'t leave much choice for the poor or which doesn\'t make them to tell what is wrong or right.
The most severe crimes are almost occured by the rich because of their greed or ambition like corruption, money laundering, assassination, fraud etc.
>> The most severe crimes mostly committed by the rich because of their greed or ambition like corruption, money laundering, assassination, fraud etc.
Those have a huge effect on society.
>> Correct
So In my opinion, most crimes are caused by people who have more.
>> Correct
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