Some people think that public health within a country can be improved by government making laws rega
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Most countries in the world are democratic states. The one of the important values in the democracy is right of freedom. If government controlled the food and supplied it, people can\'t chose the food according to their preferences. Food can be the number one value for people, because we feel satisfied with having a delicious meal. I agree with the idea about public health controlled by government. It must be effective to keep their citizens\'s health. However, I guess there will be a lot of adverse events like drugs that are not allowed in some country. We can easily see the people who are addicted the drugs. They get it with illegal trade. I think people will try to purchase the food by illegal way like drugs, if government make the law about nutritious food. To improve public, we can educate people by the professionals and announce advantages and disadvantages, if we eat some food. After that, everything will be the result of people\'s choice.
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>>> TEACHER GEMMA
Most countries in the world are democratic states.
>>> CORRECT
The one of the important values in the democracy is right of freedom.
>>> One of the important values in the democracy is freedom of rights.
If government controlled the food and supplied it, people can\'t chose the food according to their preferences.
>>> If the government would control the food and supply it, people can\'t choose the food according to their preferences.
Food can be the number one value for people, because we feel satisfied with having a delicious meal.
>>> CORRECT
I agree with the idea about public health controlled by government.
>>> I agree with the idea of the government\'s public health control.
It must be effective to keep their citizen\'s health.
>>> CORRECT
However, I guess there will be a lot of adverse events like drugs that are not allowed in some country.
>>> However, I guess there will be a lot adversaries like drugs that are not allowed in some country.
We can easily see the people who are addicted to drugs.
>>> CORRECT
They get it from illegal trading.
>>> CORRECT
I think people will try to purchase the food by illegal way like drugs, if government make the law about nutritious food.
>>> I think people will try to purchase the food illegally like drugs, if the government makes the law about nutritious food.
To improve public, we can educate people by the professionals and announce advantages and disadvantages, if we eat some food.
>>> To improve the public, we can educate the people with professionals and announce the advantages and disadvantages, if we eat some food.
After that, everything will be the result of people\'s choice.
>>> CORRECT
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