Some people think that the range of technology available to people is increasing the gap between the

2020-06-30 · 첨삭 강사 Gemma

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If selected people only can access the technology, it will cause a lot of social problem. The range of technology available can be the cause of economic inequality, because getting an information quickly result in success in the fast changing society. That means accessibility of technology can cause rich and poor gap. Furthermore, if people would like to use new technologies and medicine in medical institution, they have to pay a lot. Poor people usually are not affordable to pay for it, so they need to spend all the money that they have, even though they don\'t know if they have good result. However, rich people can spend a lot of money for their health problem without crisis in their household. New invented diagnostic machines is the key to prevent human disease but these machines are extremely expensive, so cost of it is expensive too that poor people can\'t afford to be examined. In conclusion, some technologies is decreasing rich-poor gab such as use of internet, but there are man

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If selected people only can access the technology, it will cause a lot of social problem.
>>> If only selected people can access the technology, it will cause a lot of social problems.
 The range of technology available can be the cause of economic inequality, because getting an information quickly result to success in the fast changing society. 
>>> CORRECT
That means accessibility of technology can cause rich and poor gap. 
>>> That means accessibility of technology can cause a gap between the rich and poor.
Furthermore, if people would like to use new technologies and medicine in medical institution, they have to pay a lot.
>>> CORRECT
 Poor people usually are not affordable to pay for it, so they need to spend all the money that they have, even though they don\'t know if they have good result. 
>>>  Poor people usually cannot afford to pay for it, so they need to spend all the money that they have, even though they don\'t know if they will have good results. 
However, rich people can spend a lot of money for their health problem without crisis in their household. 
>>> However, rich people can spend a lot of money for their health problems without crisis in their household. 
New invented diagnostic machines are the key to prevent human diseases but these machines are extremely expensive, so the cost of it is expensive so poor people can\'t afford to be examined.
>>> CORRECT
 In conclusion, some technologies are decreasing rich-poor gap such as the use of internet, but there are men...
>>> CORRECT

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