Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest times of most people’s lives. Others think

2020-06-01 · 첨삭 강사 Gemma

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I have regretted my life in the past because I thought if I studied more, I would be happier than now. I didn\'t know that being at school and studying is the easiest thing in my life. I have a lot of responsibilities such as babies care, making money and supporting my parents. I was thinking to live again in the past, I guess that I would study hard as well as having good relationship with friends. To support someone is big burden for me. I sometimes feel like leaving from this hard work. However, I love being an adults because I can make any decisions which are related with my life. I had to follow teachers or parents\'s direction when I was young. If I didn\'t meet their expectation, they used to scold me or disciplined me. I was eager to be free and I thought that I would be making happy life by enjoying free life. Even though, I have to take a lot of responsibilities, I don\'t want to go back to the past because I don\'t want to be under the surveillance from adults.

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>>> TEACHER GEMMA 
I have regretted my life in the past because I thought if I studied more, I would be happier than now. 
>>> I have regretted my life in the past because I thought if I studied harder, I would be happier now. 
I didn\'t know that being at school and studying is the easiest thing in my life.
>>> CORRECT
 I have a lot of responsibilities such as babies care, making money and supporting my parents.
>>>  I have a lot of responsibilities such as baby-sitting, making money and supporting my parents.
I was thinking to live again in the past, I guess that I would study hard as well as having good relationship with friends. 
>>> I was thinking to live in the past  again, I guess,  I would study harder and have good relationship with my friends. 
To support someone is big burden for me. 
>>> Supporting someone is big burden to me. 
I sometimes feel like leaving from this hard work. 
>>> CORRECT
However, I love being an adults because I can make any decisions which are related with my life.
>>> However, I love being an adult because I can make any decisions which are related with my life.
 I had to follow teachers or parents\'s direction when I was young.
>>> CORRECT
 If I didn\'t meet their expectation, they used to scold me or discipline me.
>>> CORRECT
 I was eager to be free and I thought that I would be making happy life by enjoying free life.
>>>  I was eager to be free and I thought that I would be making a happy life by enjoying my freedom.
 Even though, I have to take a lot of responsibilities, I don\'t want to go back to the past because I don\'t want to be under the surveillance of adults.
>>> CORRECT

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