Some people think that women are generally more peaceful than men as their characters are naturally
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I agree that women are more agreeable than men as the Five-Factor model of personality shows that it is true for 60% on average meaning when you randomly pick up a woman from the entire population, you will be right at 60% that she will be an agreeable person. This is one of the well-established statistics in psychology research. Interestingly enough, when you try to go about the extremely violent group of people, picking up a person from the extremely violent group, then they will be a man at 90%. This is why, from the psychological point of view, there are almost all men locked in prison for committing a violent crime. However, on average, for ordinary people, the statistics show that agreeable person being a woman in a random selection process is only 60-40 percentage of the chance that she will be that person. To sum up, ordinary women are slightly (60% on average) more peaceful then ordinary men.
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>>I agree that women are more agreeable and amicable than men as shown in the Five factor of Personality. It shows that at least 60% of women are more agreeable and amicable/peaceful/calm.
This is one of the well-established statistics in psychology research.
>>correct
Interestingly enough, when you try to go about the extremely violent group of people, picking up a person from the extremely violent group, then they will be a man at 90%.
>>correct
This is why, from the psychological point of view, there are almost all men locked in prison for committing a violent crime.
>>This is the reason why almost all men go to prison for committing a violent crime as per psychological point of view.
However, on average, for ordinary people, the statistics show that agreeable person being a woman in a random selection process is only 60-40 percentage of the chance that she will be that person.
>>However, on average, women are more peaceful as shown in the statistics with at least 60-40 percentage.
To sum up, ordinary women are slightly (60% on average) more peaceful then ordinary men.
>>To sum up, ordinary women are slightly more peaceful than ordinary men.
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