Some young people are leaving countryside to live in cities or towns, it leaves only old people in c
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Getting a job in countryside is almost impossible especially for young people. First of all, cities in countryside don\'t have chance to develop their cities because of small number of population, as a result there is no companies which can hire people in there. Secondly, young people don\'t want to be a farmer in rural area because it is harder working at farm than working in the city. Farmers have to be exposed sun for a long time. So they usually get up early morning around 4 AM and then, start their day early to escape from hot weather.
Thirdly, there aren\'t enough cultural facilities and infrastructure, such as hospitals, markets and public offices. That makes people leave their hometown. Lastly, there are few young men and women. There isn\'t a chance to meet many people.
In conclusion, there are a lot of social problem regarding living in countryside. Government and politicians have to invest in the countryside and then encourage people to move in there once all facility are ready
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>>> TEACHER GEMMA
Getting a job in countryside is almost impossible especially for young people.
>>> CORRECT
First of all, cities in countryside don\'t have a chance to develop their cities because of small number of population and as a result there is no companies which can hire people there.
>>> CORRECT
Secondly, young people don\'t want to be a farmer in rural areas because it is harder working at farms than working in the city.
>>> CORRECT
Farmers have to be exposed under the sun for a long time.
>>> CORRECT
So they usually get up early morning around 4 AM and then, start their day early to escape from the hot weather.
>>> CORRECT
Thirdly, there aren\'t enough cultural facilities and infrastructure, such as hospitals, markets and public offices.
Thirdly, there aren\'t enough cultural facilities and infrastructure, such as hospitals, markets and public offices.
>>> CORRECT
That makes people leave their hometown.
>>> CORRECT
Lastly, there are a few young men and women.
>>> CORRECT
There isn\'t a chance to meet many people.
>>> CORRECT
In conclusion, there are a lot of social problem regarding living in countryside.
>>> CORRECT
The government and politicians have to invest in the countryside and then encourage people to move there once all facilities are ready.
>>> CORRECT
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