Someone who commit crimes for some good cause should also be punished
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I think someone who commit crimes for some good cause should also be punished.
This is because someone broke the law, no matter how good the reason may be.
However, if the motive of crime is reasonable, I think the court need to reduce sentence.
After Korea\'s 1945 liberation from Japan, there was a severe conflict between left and right wings in Korea.
[이름] Gu, who was a famous independence activist and who wanted to establish a unified government in Korea, and Lee Seong-man, who wanted to establish a unitary government in South Korea, were at odds.
In 1949, [이름] Gu was killed by a soldier.
This soldier, whose name is Ann Du-hui was known to most Korean that he was abetted by a side of Lee Seong-man.
After then, Ann Du-hui lived in hiding under numerous death threats.
In 1996, He finally was killed by a man who had respected [이름] Gu.
This murderer was sentenced to 3 years in prison because the court took the extenuating circumstances into consideration.
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Hello there, [이름]!
I truly appreciate your effort in researching and recalling a historical account to bolster your answer to the homework question posted on your page.
This is a political and historical crime committed due to ideology. We can see them as well during these times such as the fate of the late Shinzo Abe. This may be a different case but it has its political and social implications.
Nevertheless, your accounts are factual and your exposition was clear. I understood all of your sentences since you used a powerful set of vocabulary words appropriate to the serious discussion of this topic. In addition, you arrived at a logical conclusion and a solid evidence of your point to answer the given homework question.
Hence, analyze carefully the use of the deter[이름]er \'the\' in your sentences. The underlined word/s are for your grammar development. Read them through. Carry on with this intensity of writing. Great job!
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>> I think someone who commits crimes for some good cause should also be punished.
This is because someone broke the law, no matter how good the reason may be.
>> Correct!
However, if the motive of crime is reasonable, I think the court need to reduce sentence.
>> However, if the motive of crime is reasonable, I think the court need to reduce the sentence.
>> After Korea\'s 1945 liberation from Japan, there was a severe conflict between the left and right wings in Korea.
[이름] Gu, who was a famous independence activist and who wanted to establish a unified government in Korea, and Lee Seong-man, who wanted to establish a unitary government in South Korea, were at odds.
>> Correct! Very good sentence!
In 1949, [이름] Gu was killed by a soldier.
In 1949, [이름] Gu was killed by a soldier.
>> Correct!
This soldier, whose name is Ann Du-hui was known to most Korean that he was abetted by a side of Lee Seong-man.
>> This soldier, whose name is Ann Du-hui was known to most Korean that he was abetted by the side of Lee Seong-man.
After then, Ann Du-hui lived in hiding under numerous death threats.
After then, Ann Du-hui lived in hiding under numerous death threats.
>> After then, Ann Du-hui lived hiding under numerous death threats.
In 1996, He finally was killed by a man who had respected [이름] Gu.
In 1996, He finally was killed by a man who had respected [이름] Gu.
>> Correct!
Or: In 1996, he was finally killed by a man who had respected [이름] Gu.
This murderer was sentenced to 3 years in prison because the court took the extenuating circumstances into consideration.
>> Correct! Very good vocabulary!
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