something bad that happened, Historical place
학생이 쓴 원문
I usually have some time when I have trouble. However, there are situation that time can’t solve. When my friends fight each other, the atmosphere is really not good. So I try to make them talk. This way mostly solve our problem.
1. The place name is Gyeongju, located in southern part of my area. It is not one of the capital cities, but it is well known to people because of their many historic things.
2. This place is a very small area, but we can easily find here because all village of Gyeongju are surrounded by traditional cultures. If we actually go there, we can feel old Korea world. Also, many hotel is made hanok, our traditional building.
3. It is landmark of Gyeongju and it also represent our traditional cultures. This place has many kinds of old buildings, daily necessities and temple. These things are exist in many areas but this area has most variety things.
강사 첨삭
WOW! This is very interesting. Thank you for sharing. ^_^
>> I usually have some time when I have troubles.
However, there are situation that time can’t solve.
>> However, there are situations that I can’t solve.
When my friends fight each other, the atmosphere is really not good.
>> When my friends fight with each other, the atmosphere is not really good.
So I try to make them talk.
>> Correct.
This way mostly solve our problem.
1. The place name is Gyeongju, located in southern part of my area.
>> This way, we mostly solve our problem.
>> There is this place called Gyeongju, located in the southern part of my area.
It is not one of the capital cities, but it is well known to people because of their many historic things.
2. This place is a very small area, but we can easily find here because all village of Gyeongju are surrounded by traditional cultures.
>> It is not one of the capital cities, but it is well known to people because of their many historical things.
>> 2. This place is a very small area, but is easily found because all villages of Gyeongju are surrounded by traditional cultures.
If we actually go there, we can feel old Korea world.
>> If we go there, we can feel old Korean ambiance.
Also, many hotel is made hanok, our traditional building.
3. It is landmark of Gyeongju and it also represent our traditional cultures.
>> Also, many hotels are made of hanok, our traditional house.
>> 3. It is the landmark in Gyeongju and it also represents our traditional cultures.
This place has many kinds of old buildings, daily necessities and temple.
>> This place has many kinds of old buildings, daily necessities and temples.
These things are exist in many areas but this area has most variety things.
>> These things are existing in many areas around Korea, but they have the most variety of things.
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