Something I would risk my life
학생이 쓴 원문
In my forties, I was busy expanding my academies. I once ran three academies. All of my attention was focused on my academies. I didn\'t take care of myself, didn\'t have enough time to relax, and even ignored any symptoms of my body. Eventually I had a severe surgery of womb extraction. The doctor scolded me for neglecting the cyst in my womb. He said that the cyst would have become a malignant tumor if I had come a little later. After four-hour surgery, I had to get transfusions for three days. I thought severe workaholic took a risk our lives.
강사 첨삭
Hi, Gi [이름]!
First, I want to commend you for using the word \"transfusion\". It shows how eager you are in applying the words we\'ve learned. Also, it\'s a good thing that you went to the doctor before the sickness became incurable. I\'m happy to hear that in our lesson you said you won\'t risk your life again just to obtain something. It shows that you are now prioritizing health more than anything else.
- T. Caitlyn
In my forties, I was busy expanding my academies.
>> CORRECT
I once ran three academies.
>> CORRECT
All of my attention was focused on my academies.
>> CORRECT
I didn\'t take care of myself, didn\'t have enough time to relax, and even ignored any symptoms of my body.
>> CORRECT
Eventually I had a severe surgery of womb extraction.
>> Eventually, I had major surgery for womb extraction.
The doctor scolded me for neglecting the cyst in my womb.
>> CORRECT
He said that the cyst would have become a malignant tumor if I had come a little later.
>> CORRECT
After four-hour surgery, I had to get transfusions for three days.
>> CORRECT
I thought severe workaholic took a risk our lives.
>> I thought being a severe workaholic was risking our lives.
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