Something that I want to change about my house
학생이 쓴 원문
There are several things that I want to change in my house. I can divide them into two types, outside design and interior.
First, in terms of outside facilities, I want to improve my apartment’s facilities. My apartment has been built a long time ago, thus there are not a lot of necessary facilities such as stationery store or cafes. Sometimes, it is quite inconvenient to go far away in order to buy some necessities.
On the other hand, I prefer to change my house interior to french style. Since my mom like modern style, my house does not hava a lot of objets. Therefore, the house looks a bit empty.
In conclusion, thinking about this topic, I want to build a house of my own style if I have a chance later.
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Hi Emily! That sounds like a good idea. Imagine all the possibilities that you could do that would suit your taste. With that, you can really feel the essence of home. :)
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First, in terms of outside facilities, I want to improve my apartment’s facilities.
On the other hand, I prefer to change my house interior to french style.
In conclusion, thinking about this topic, I want to build a house of my own style if I have a chance later.
There are several things that I want to change in my house.
>> CORRECT
I can divide them into two types, outside design and interior.
>> I can divide them into two types, interior and exterior.
First, in terms of outside facilities, I want to improve my apartment’s facilities.
>> First, in terms of exterior, I want to improve my apartment’s facilities.
My apartment has been built a long time ago, thus there are not a lot of necessary facilities such as stationery store or cafes.
>> My apartment has been built a long time ago, thus there are not a lot of necessary facilities such as stationery stores or cafes.
Sometimes, it is quite inconvenient to go far away in order to buy some necessities.
>>CORRECT
On the other hand, I prefer to change my house interior to french style.
>> On the other hand, I prefer to change my house\'s interior to French style.
Since my mom like modern style, my house does not hava a lot of objets.
>> Since my mom likes modern style, my house does not have a lot of things inside it.
Therefore, the house looks a bit empty.
>>CORRECT
In conclusion, thinking about this topic, I want to build a house of my own style if I have a chance later.
>>CORRECT
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