sometimes stress is a tonic our lives~
학생이 쓴 원문
as everyone does, we are under a lot of stress our lives.
and each other have a method to relieve stress.
someone read a book such as cartoon, listen to a music, eat something, drink, exercise to relieve stress.
in my case, when i stressed, listen to a music and lost in thougth.
when i was lost in thougth, i can think what i have to do, what i don't have to do and so on.
on the other if people don't confront a certain amount of stress in their lives, they will be bored.
so i think, it is a important to relieve stress each other.
if we don't have a method to relieve then we will be lost the will to live.
anyways~
have a great weekend and take a enough rest~
bye~
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]!! Thank you so much for this thought. Yes, you are right. Sometimes we need to stress ourselves for us not to be bored. ^^ your sentences are good but always remember the proper usage of your articles. Have a great weekend too [이름] and I will talk top you again on Monday!!! Take care!!!
Lei J
as everyone does, we are under a lot of stress with our lives.>>correctand each other have a method to relieve stress.>>and each of us have a method on how to relieve stress.someone reads a book such as cartoon, listen to music, eat something, drink, exercise to relieve stress.>>correctin my case, when i am stressed, I listen to music and lost in thought.>>correctwhen i was lost in thougth, i can think of what i have to do, what i don't have to do and so on.>>correctto other if people don't confront a certain amount of stress in their lives, they will be bored.>>correctso i think, it is a important to relieve stress.>>correctif we don't have a method to relieve it, then we will be loosing the will to live.>>correctanyways~have a great weekend and take enough rest~>>correctbye~
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